So, conch shell made me giggle. I actually giggled a few times from 0:00 to 0:36 everything from 0:37 to 1:00 could have been left out. It was overly self-critical, and didn't really add to where you're going with the video.
The weed story was funny, but could have gotten to the punchlines faster.
Watch story: I LOLed
I think really you could leave out all the self-critical stuff. The I suck at names, I suck at numbers. I think I get what you're trying to do, but it's not coming across as funny to me. It's just taking me out of your storytelling.
I giggled at the elephant test.
Lol, head to teachers' room, and regret my life decisions.
Maybe at the end, instead of "I'm not even gonna bother with this.." Something like, "eh, you know how youtube works." Or maybe just kind of trail off and walk away, cut to end title cards.
Overall, really good. Like I said, I laughed a few times. Everything above are my thoughts as I watched. I think the self critical stuff is coming across as mean, and kind of sad instead of funny. Not sure why, maybe it's the delivery? But really your video is great without those parts thrown in.
Good luck with your channel!! I'll have to go check out your other videos.
~Sherri
