After watching this, I have a few issues and critiques. The first would be the subject of this thread because it's so vague, which isn't good for getting people to reply. As for your video, I would focus less on explaining the game, which is something hundreds of LPers have done. Instead, maybe try to add in some humor and be more spontaneous. It's up to you how you do that, but something needs to be done to make you stand out. And I would add in an annotation that allows your viewers to skip the opening cutscenes. I've personally seen dozens of videos featuring the same content. I hope some of this helps.